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First Poem of 2020 Poetry Contest!
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sometimes from great adversity comes the sweetest rose.
While I love the sentiment in this poem, for me, it felt a bit incongruent. There are 2 distinct categories described here, one Western and Christian, the other Eastern and Asian. They don't seem to fit together. At least, not without some wordsmithing.
Thanks both for your comments!
@ G. Donald Cribbs, why do you feel they can't go together? I'll certainly consider it and I'd like to hear more of your thoughts on this.
I think they can go together, I just think it could benefit from some retooling. I did not notice a form, or rhyme scheme, so why do you use enjambment at times? (e.g. lotus flower) Why not let the line flow more conversationally? Each word and each choice should speak chapters in a poem. You've got great potential here. Best wishes to you, Talitha! :D